[FridayFlash] The End of the World
Trying something a little different this week. Would love to hear any feedback.
If you’re in the mood for some holiday-themed short fiction, feel free to check out some of my other stories!
- The Death of Santa
- Notice
- On Christmas (plus a video tale of Christmas terror)
- Charity: A Christmas Story (one of my favorites)
- The Search for Santa
And a bonus holiday how-not-to video:
And be sure to check out all the other great fiction at the #FridayFlash Collector, too! Thanks, and Happy Friday!
THE END OF THE WORLD
© 2012 Elizabeth Ditty
Posted on December 21, 2012, in #fridayflash and tagged 12/21/2012, christmas fiction, christmas short fiction, christmas stories, christmas story, christmas video, end of the world, flash fiction, free fiction, holiday fiction, holiday how-to, holiday short story, holiday stories, holiday story, holiday video, iphone, rudolph, short fiction, slice of life, text, text message, texting. Bookmark the permalink. 5 Comments.
I like the instant message gimmick. It’s a good grounds for a dialogue-based story.
I had trouble with the opening. Are you sure that “What this time?” is supposed to belong to the blue speaker? Because Blue initiates the conversation about the world ending, then seems to ask White what the matter is, even though Blue is the one with the world-ending complaint. If Blue is supposed to have that line, then perhaps there should be more of a transition after “Again?”
You are correct! I was trying to jimmy this together last night with my eyes half-closing, & I thought before I went to bed that maybe I’d messed something up, but I was too tired to deal with it.
Hopefully people will see your comment & figure it out!
this works really well, I liked it a lot. the ending was cool too
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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