[FridayFlash] A Love Story in Five Parts
Kicking off #FridayFlash in February with a love story of sorts. Did something a bit experimental here, so I’d love to hear any feedback you have to offer. Happy reading, and don’t forget to check out the other great #FridayFlash stories this week, too!
I
I cannot imagine loving anyone more than you.
Our hearts aren’t big enough for more than this.
This lock will symbolize our passion.
Here, let me.
The key turns, grasps, fails and drowns.
II
You can’t do this to me.
I’m not doing this to you.
You’re killing me.
You’ll live. I promise.
The lovers part. The lock remains.
III
Tear-reddened eyes stare.
No more words.
Angry footsteps.
The wind gusts.
The lock clanks against the metal.
IV
Night falls, but the stars stay hidden.
Mist covers the known world.
Steel pincers emerge and bite hard.
The lock falls, splashes, sinks.
All hope lost.
V
A friendly current takes pity.
The reluctant mud finally concedes.
The lock sails, then catches on a miracle.
The pieces, though battered, still come together like new.
Reunion delivers its sweet release.
© 2013 Elizabeth Ditty
Posted on February 1, 2013, in #fridayflash, experimental, holidays, short fiction, Valentine's Day and tagged #fridayflash, breakup, experimental fiction, experimental short fiction, experimental short story, flash fiction, free short fiction, free short story, love locks, love padlocks, love story, paris, pont des arts, romance, romantic short fiction, romantic short story, short fiction, short love story, valentine's day. Bookmark the permalink. 10 Comments.
Beautiful metaphor.
Thank you, Icy. The Pont Des Arts is really quite a site to see, and I wondered how many of those couples end up in heartbreak. And then my mind wandered from there!
Oh, how lovely!
A beautiful piece of writing.
Thank you both!
Lovely piece
Thank you!
This is simply beautiful. I love the analogy of the lost key and the unfulfilled promise. Beautiful story.
Thank you so much!
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